(Jack and Algernon at dinner table)
J: So Algy, when are you going to get yourself in paid work?
A: ah! i was waiting for you to ask such personal question!
J: well i mean wealth comes from ones sweat don't you think?
A: (jokingly) ones wealth comes from ones ancestors!
5 second silence
A: but, what have YOU been doing?
J: (taking out cigarette case and lighting one up) oh well since you ask, a lot of things such as (sarcastically) jesting! And most probably making money as we all.
A: the humor in ones tone does enlighten me, i'm intrigued tell me more.
J: oh no i could go on forever! i shall come and visit sometime soon. Goodnight Algy.
*Jack exists
it's rather humorous in my head... please laugh haha.
ReplyDeletewww well done, an attempt to capture the register of the characters through the use of certain language features, in particular the self address 'one'.
ReplyDeleteebi lack of capitals and some lack of fluency diminish the quality of the work, it is also on the short side and therefore lacks the depth or quality to move it beyond level 1.